final CD version is on youTube now. think it sounds OK for YT
cheers & thanks :) 
-Daren 
 
http://youtu.be/SwkU-dgV6Yw
 
 

#ThrowAwaySong
Words & Music by Daren Thomas Turner
©2013 #MRI
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A painful observation of all of you here
Pessimistic, overdriven, troglodytive
Hello! My name is: NAME TAG
Please laminate my head
Stick me in a cubicle
Ass-f*ck me 'till i'm dead
Hurricanes and earthquakes love my zen Malthusian
'cause you reek of all your cronies and dirty nepotism
I am just an effigy burning up in flames
I'd rather be just thrown away than ever born again
Suicidal tendencies cut into my flesh
To dream in phenobarbital into foreverness
I am the vicious mirror that anorexics fear
Permanent obfuscation
Believing it's real
The point blank honesty that has made you hate my face
Also makes your own opinion of no f*cking consequence
My only friends are mannequins who linger on Facebook
I just posted my obituary and no one even looked
Hello! My name is: NAME TAG
Hello! My name is: NAME TAG
Hello! My name is: NAME TAG
Hello! My name is: NAME TAG
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all noises by daren

Now that was cool, I really FN loved it !!!!!!!!
 

Hi Daren, I admire anyone that can write songs in different time signatures. Don't throw this one away, keep it, 'cause it's really got something.

hey thanks Alkie & rebel007 -
cool I won't trash it then lol -
Kinda excited to turn it into something -what that "something" is I'm not quite sure yet but the fun is finding out. eg not sure if to take into electronica land or rock/alternative rock or maybe neither or some combo of both. learning how to write beats better/ this is new for me as i always use live drums - Wanna keep an eastern / African edge somewhere in rhythm pattern already established. I hear a French horn in between verses - there are more harmonies too this isn't really mixed esp vocals there are two scratch tracks I used that bounced on accident -
if anyone has any ideas let me know
thanks again for feedback :)
- Daren

Definite keeper. Chris de Burgh would be proud of that face/consequence though ;)

@paulo: cool bro! thanks :) hey is that the Lady In Red guy ^? ;0

Hey, Daren,
 
Very cool sounding and interesting fusion rocker with a psychedelic vibe and a dark vintage feel!
 
I really like the percussion, and the guitar and vocals sound great.
 
Good stuff, can't wait to hear the finished product!
 
Have a good one, bro!
Bob

Sounds like it's got a lot of potential to me. I like the vibe and mood, the whole vocal thing..but it is getting repetitive, which is actually ok, I'm not sure I'd change the music up at all because that kind of works - although, from a listener's perspective the vocals need to go somewhere else at some point, mix it up, keep the interest.  I never felt any transition - just a steady 3 minutes of the same thing.  Again, the music portion of that actually works to my tastes, just need something in there somewhere, to go somewhere else for a minute, something....
 
It's still playing in my head, so that's saying something. 

ABeautifulVirus
@paulo: cool bro! thanks :) hey is that the Lady In Red guy ^? ;0

You got it ! ;)

cul.