This mix is much better overall nice tune, still a little on the quite side.
 
Thanks for sharing again.

Hmmm.... I mastered in Izotope.  The peak is right around -3DB and RMS around -10DB.  I can't seem to get the RMS any higher without totally squashing the signal.  Starts to sound really bad after that point.  Any thoughts?  Pointers?

This is most excellent sir!!  You have a very sincere quality to your voice.  I like that.  The lyrics are very good.  I listened to both versions.  The "Master" version is a big improvement on the original.  The original was way to compressed.  There is still some noticeable compression on the acoustic guitar in the new mix but I like it because it brings it to the forefront of the mix.  I like the background vocals.  The girl singing has a beautiful voice and I like the point-counterpoint thing a lot.  Nice bridge and stop before the finish.  It's a really well thought out composition in my opinion.  Looking forward to hearing more from you Keith!

Thank you very much Ralph.  I however, didn't sing it.  My buddy Ace did.  I played all the instruments except the violin.  Had to outsource that to a friend.  My ex girlfriend sang the BU Vox. 
 
Keith

Well, whoever did what, I like it a lot.  I'm not just saying this.  I mean it!  Did you write the song Keith?  

Yes.  I wrote it.  First song I've ever written and actually finished.  LOL!!

Well, that's just it.  YOU wrote the song.  Without you there would be no song.  Whoever sang what and did what is immaterial.  However, the singer IS very good!  

Thanks!!

Keithr41
Starts to sound really bad after that point.  Any thoughts?  Pointers?

Not without seeing the mix, if you understand, the only thought that crosses my mind is that something in the conversion chain is lowering the overall volume.  What do you use to convert to MP3?

Keith, good song and clever lyrics.  As others have noted, the overall volume is quite low, so there may be something going on in the mastering stage.  Other than that, kudos on the vocal and acoustic guitar, and to the rest of your mates for their contribution.