Wookiee
Works here for me liked what my furry ears were telling me.

Thanks, Mr. Wookiee.

patm300e
Very nicely balnaced between instruments and vocals.  Really like when the harmonies kick in...

Thanks, patm300e. Nice to have the confirmed by a second/third pair of ears.

rontarrant

speedtom
nice one! it sounded a bit to me like as if the Dandy Warhols are releasing an acoustic album. I particularily like your voice when you are hitting the lower notes. For I only listened now on PC speakers, I will re-listen later with headphones and might have more to say about the mix...

Thanks, speedtom. I'll have to look up Dandy Warhols; never heard of him.

seriously? thry this:
 
http://vimeo.com/3288127
 
they have some excellent songs - saw them opening for Bowie in 2003. great combination!

speedtom
seriously? thry this:
http://vimeo.com/3288127
they have some excellent songs - saw them opening for Bowie in 2003. great combination!

Great song. Made me feel stoned just listening to it. Maybe it was the 12-string.  

I just want to thank everyone who took the time to listen. Remix in progress.

It's obvious you have spent a great deal of time on this song, I think it's well mixed and the balance of everything sounds right to my ears.
I'm not sure I can add anything further, I relate too closely to the song.

rebel007
It's obvious you have spent a great deal of time on this song, I think it's well mixed and the balance of everything sounds right to my ears.
I'm not sure I can add anything further, I relate too closely to the song.

Thanks, rebel007.
Yes, I started recording this song in September and, other than boning up on audio engineering and the other, usual, distractions, I've been working on it pretty much non-stop since then... with several rewind-to-the-beginning moments thrown in to keep from straying too far down the wrong path.
 
In fact, I've just initiated another rewind after realizing that I'd stomped a bit too hard on the lead vocal (which may not be so noticeable in the pre-mix version I posted on SoundCloud) and completely lost track of the fader levels for a couple of the guitars.
 
I'm also working on a second version that's more electric.
 
I also found a willing collaborator (long distance, unfortunately, but still...) to do a proper lead break, but that might take a while since he's still got to get his home studio set up.
 
Anyway, I'll be back.

Mix sounds pretty darned good to me. Very clean recording. I do agree with James that it could be a tad shorter. I made it to 3:55 before I looked at the waveform to see where I was in the song.
 
Regards,
Dan
 

Nice work... it reminded me of Gordon Lightfoot which is a cool thing.
 
It builds nicely.
 
My suggestion would be to shorten it up. You did mention "commercial" usage, so it needs to be around 3:00 to 3:30 in length (ideally) for that purpose.
 
As far as the "unmastered" aspect.... it was a bit low in volume. Don't hesitate to put the polish on your tunes that you post. Put them out there in their best light as far as you are able.
 
I tend to insert my "polishing tools" right at the very beginning of a song project. That way, as I go along and add tracks and FX to those tracks I know and hear exactly what I will end up with at the final export. I like to say that I'm working on the final master from the very start.

I have nothing to add to the comments above other than it sounds good to me.  The volume was a bit low but I don't know if that is just my system.
Nice one!!