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I plan on making this a lot longer but this is sort of the demo for the track, the first part.  I am going to make like 4 more parts that form one whole long song.  I think it could be cool :)

Looking for critical feedback if anyone has any for me :) will be glad to return the favor.

Alex,
 
There is nothing to critique!! Sounds right on the money and a great mix. Like the sounds and textures that you used in this, very creative piece. Not sure I would make it to much longer, sounds good on its own. Better to make several different pieces with different titles. You could also have like a prelude to the piece, interlude, prologue and even an epilogue, where everything relates to the main theme you are trying to capture. If you do make it longer, it should build and then captivate and then fade out. Just my opinion. Nice work.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

Thanks a lot.  Yeah might be cool to have completely different parts, that are different enough to be their own song.
I really appreciate the feedback so much.

Yeah, I agree about there not being a whole lot to critique.  Sounds freaking cool.  You guys who "understand" synths and sound scapes like that make me jealous.  I find the whole thing really confusing.  You seem to really have a nice handle on laying down that cool electronic backdrop.  Nice!

Wow! Love the composition and the sounds. Listened several times.
 
I think you could do a lot more with this piece, and so I agree with your idea of creating a longer piece from this demo. In fact, I think the piece would benefit with some more alteration between the more acoustic piano-like parts and the more intense synth lead parts. The only way to do this would be to lengthen the piece. Here is a rough idea of what I'm talking about:
 
The first section of the song is perfect. Then the leads synths come in on what I'd call the second section and pick up the intensity nicely. Then you return to a calmer section of the piano type of sounds, which is different than the opening, and provides a nice contrast/change of pace. It's excellent, too. Then in the last third of the song or so the the lead synths come back in and up the intensity, and the complexity of the arrangement increases. This third section is very good too, but this is where I feel the piece could benefit from some more slower suspenseful development. It's all good, but I think could be better with a little slower development.
 
If I had created this piece of music, I'd be really excited about what I had just created, and also excited about the possibilities. So I wish you luck if you choose to take it further.

Thanks so much for the great feedback and ideas.  I for sure am listening.

straight and simple .. I like this.

But then I am a big Tangerine Dream fan and can hear lots of TD in this ( from the Love on a Real train period )  .. aint a bad think :D
 
 

I like it. Great sounds and well played. Mix is very good also.

Nice job! Great use of the delays to accentuate the parts. Mix is solid and very well done!
 
Regards,
Dan