This reminds me of a Frank (Notnat) song. I like the song a lot. My only crit would be to, where it can be done, change the bass line to a dotted quarter-eighth.
 
Nice job!

mike_mccue
I think this sounds great Bapu!
 
Something seems to have opened up in the middle. The vocals sound really nice and there is a space that has appeared that allows me to hear the way your vocal lines and the bass part interact. It made the vocals sound more natural and relaxed. The bass part and the bass playing seems to frame the vocals nicely. It's a pleasure to sit back and listen to your insights and reflections.
 
Wonderful!
 
best regards,
mike 

Thanks Mike. 

daryl1968
Nice one Baps

Thanks my primate errm I mean Daryk errrm I mean Daryl

Nice original song with a nice sound. t's an interesting song as far as the lyrics and shows that you are trying to work things out in your own life for you, and that is always a good thing. Well done and nicely sung.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

Jonbouy
 
I see this has had a fair share of work done on it.
 
This is the first version I've heard and it is a story that couldn't be told be anyone else in a way that would mean as much.
 
IOW it's perfect and therefore a fully baked cake that can be taken from the oven.  I enjoyed my slice at least.
 
 

'ave another mate. Anytime.

I figured that if I wrote this now you could ignore it for several months and then use answering it as a really lame excuse to bump yourself to the top of the page again sometime next year. ;)

twisted6s
This "software" forum sometimes makes us focus on recording technique and plus or minus db this and that and we tend to forget about heart and feel. I love this bro. You have heart and feel.

Tony, thank you so much for the kind words.

I didn't hear any of the previous mixes but I really liked this one.  It definitely shows that you put a part of you in this one.
Well done!!!!

 
 

 I didn't hear it before but I like the balance of instruments now.
Appropriate for the genre.
It ends a bit abruptly IMHO.
One other thing that occurs to me as a song is that it feels like a series of verses rather than verse and chorus.
IOW I don't recognize a chorus.
Nicely done tho. good vocal tone and separation.