I agree with Philz ... I think it's a really well done song. I hear what everyone is saying about the guitar, but if it was left how it is, it wouldn't ruin it if you know what I mean.

Good to hear something original from you Bapu.

Thanks.  Bub.


Edit: I picked up on the upside down "Am" in the picture.

Very Dylanesque.  I like it.  I could almost hear a B3 in the background a la Like A Rolling Stone.  

I am proud of you Ed. I like this song, I like the performance, and the Dylanesque style. Nobody could sing this better. We have our differences when it comes to mixing style, and at this point, I am going to suggest that you may want to look at your monitoring setup. I do not know what you use, but I do not think you are getting an accurate representation of what is being reproduced.

I liked the music underneath, and the lyrics were real nice, but I felt the vocals didn't sit right somehow. They felt like they were delivered exactly the same way with each word, and not much variety.

You have a nice voice babu, but I don't feel you are pushing it to its full potential. 

I hope you are not offended by this as it is not my intention.

Mark.

I like the song.  And you did a nice job.  Great lyrics - always more personal when it's a story about one's self.  And the fact that you performed the whole thing gives it that much more impact.

It's really great to hear you singing and writing from the heart.


best regards,
mike

Ed,
 
Good song.   I would push the LVox up a bit.  It is kind of buried in the mix.   Very Dylan'ish and quite nicely done.
 
Regards

notnat


I don't know James... I think it's mainly that C-note on the B string, that is sticking way out there... I'd try to notch-filter that note... otherwise the mix sounds ok to me... I'm not excited by the melody, or the somewhat stiff delivery, but all-in-all, it was not bad... I like the lyrics... I didn't know you were a gypsy... nice job Ed...

Frank, 


Thanks for the honesty. I really do appreciated it. For me it's never frowned upon. I feel that if I post a song here it is my responsibility to be open to accepting everyone's opinion on what they "hear".


As a beginning singer I realize that my delivery is stiff. And I know that since I "wrote" the melody in real time (not mapped out on a instrument first) it is probably not my best or most interesting melody.  Someone said to me (privately) that I sound like I'm singing as if I am listening to myself and not just "going for it" totally from the heart. That is pretty accurate for me.


To be honest I was singing from my heart but my tool (vocal ability) is not yet honed and I know that. At my age (just turned 60) I may never get a honed voice but I'm grateful I have the ability to put out there what I can do without being too embarrassed (even before the comments).


As far as being a gypsy , that is how I described my father who quit school in the 10th grade and was a practicing alcoholic up until the day he died at at age 67. He never not have a career. We moved numerous times until I was 16. I went to seven different elementary schools in California, Colorado, Wisconsin and Illinois and.... I went to two of them at different grades. So I see that as being a gypsy child if that makes sense.

Nice one Ed. That piano is very purdy.

Thanks for sharing your heart ED.  Better peeps than me here to give you advice.