Here is a more polished song that is completely brand new.  It's called Elias Cole.  Elias Cole is such a musical name.  And it rhymes with just about everything!  My good friend Ron played lead guitar on this song.  Everything else (except the drums) is me. Please enjoy the story of Elias Cole.
 
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Hope you like it!!!
Don

Really like this groove, and the tremolo rhythm guitar.  Love the lead guitar!  This is the kind of production that I always go for.  Straight ahead.
 
As for the song itself, the lyrics tell an interesting story about your character, although I think maybe it's a bit too long (and maybe a little graphic in places).  Also, some of the lyric lines seem rushed, with too many syllables on a line.  But that's just personal taste, so do with it as you will. :)
 
Overall, very nice work!

Thank you for listening Walt!!!  It's weird how things pan out.  I consider this to be one of my very best songs. Yet when I posted it on Facebook and on this forum I got very little response.  So you never know whats going to happen.  What I think is my best others don't and vice versa.
 
Yes, the song and story is a little long.  I agree!!!  And yes, it is graphic.  But the overall message of the song is that drugs are bad for you, even if you're a gunfighter.  Lol.  There are also a lot of syllables and the cadence is choppy, but that was intentionally written that way.  
 
Thank you for the comments on the music.  I think that part of it came out great.  My friend Ron played what I think is an amazing guitar solo on this song.
 
Thank you very much Walt!

Interesting story and most of the song is well produced to my furry ears.  My only crit would be the reverb on the chorus perhaps just a tad to much or even a slightly different one would work better.
 
As for length in radio terms you break the 3:30 rule but it is your song and your tale.  I can think of many successful songs that break the radio length rule
 
Thanks for sharing.

I echo what others said above, liked the guitar, liked the song, liked the mix.  Nice job.
 
(I hate re-writing, but usually end up with a better song if I do.  You might consider condensing some lyrics and seeing what happens.)   

I'm happy you guys listened!!  Thanks John (Wookie) and Scott (Olemon).  Yes, the song is a tad on the long side.  But I can't think of what verse I could remove or how I could make it shorter.  I could remove the second chorus at the end though.  Maybe?  Still, it would still be a solid 5:00 anyway.
 
It's funny how sometimes you think something is going to be a sure hit and people are going to love it, and then you post it and it just sinks like a stone. Still, I'm glad I posted and I have a few more songs to post soon.  Including a Christmas song which will be lots of fun.  Tanks for listening!!!

I thought I commented on this but when I listened I couldn't log in from where I was. I think this is "excellent" Poor Elias :-( He just wanted to get drunk, enjoy the ladies, and do some gambling and illicit drugs, who hasn't been there?

I knew you would like this song Robby!!!  Thank you man.  Yeah, poor Elias...back when this country was really free a man could buy drugs & liquor anywhere he wanted, gamble anyplace it was available, and legally buy a lady for the night (excuse me girls).  Everyone has their vices and Elias had his.  But you k'now, he died smiling, didn't he?  Peace!

"and legally buy" We all pay for it one way or another... Ain't none of it free :-( At this point? I like the Hertz method personally. Hey, I returned it with a full tank? Shouldn't that count for something?

  That's for sure.  If it looks to good to be true, it probably is.  It's the Hertz Donut method.