KP Duty - not loud enough, the mix needs a lot of work. Can't really hear the song very well, but your voice reminds me a bit of Roy Orbison. Listen to the final mix, and compare it to another (commercial) piece of music that you like, then adjust individual parts until you get in the right ballpark.
Thinking Pink - I think you're using a bit too much reverb. Definitely sounds like Pink Floyd though.
Dragons Breath - Major digital clipping (pops) happening here (big problem). You need to identify the source and fix it. Each track in your mix needs to be recorded at a volume that is as loud as possible, but without distorting. If you're looking to do a little research about this, google for "gain staging" and you should find some really good advice.
I don't mean to sound discouraging, even though the above probably is exactly that. I just figure people who post here are looking to learn and don't want a pat on the head. ;) Your songwriting does show potential, and your willingness to experiment with so many different kinds of instruments (including synths, drums, guitars) will take you far. The only way to learn is through study and practice, so keep it up! :)