Well the others dont know I put up this here though its not ready yet but nearly.
I hope for some hints on where it could be better.
Soundcloud
https://soundcloud.com/jedson/eagletest27
 
Any thouths are welcom....
 
Eko

Man, I really enjoyed this song. If anything, I'd like to see the 7/8 section explored a little more. Maybe a guitar lead over top of the synth lick. Very reminiscent of Genesis in the 'old days' . Anxious to see how this song developes. Well done!

I love the background vocals used as sound textures.  Some minor pitch/performance issues on the main vocal.  I would also love to hear more of the 7/8 bridge - it's over way too quickly.  I love the retro feel.  Really nice song overall!

Will keep an eye out for the development which should be interesting with a start like this.
 
Thanks for sharing.

Nice start to something that will surprise us all. Keep it going for sure.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

I, too, like where this is going.  It's very creative and unpredictable.  The mix is sophisticated, and I think you're just a tweak or two away from a stellar song.  Perhaps, it's as little as playing with the relative volumes of the parts.  I'll be back later.

Thank you all for your wise advices I will bring them back to the guys and hopefully soon be back with the result.

In that low register, it's difficult to understand/make out the vocals. I would consider pitching it up. It was easier when you went up and octive. But it seems like some things are competing with the vocal frequencies in the middle, maybe look at panning as well as perhaps some EQ treatment? 
 
I really like the piano, and the electric guitar, BGV, and your arrangement there at the CODA/Break, a bit of an Elton John vibe to me. But then the vox drop back in to the abyss.. Maybe you could modulate there?

Thanks to all for suggestions  This is show it Went down; 
https://soundcloud.com/egon1/eagle47

Nice one eko. Only nits I can think of would be to tweak the soft voc parts with clip envelopes to soften some of the consenents. (t's and s's).