@ Robbie - Thanks for listening again and for pointing me in the right direction.
 
@ Walt - Thank you for you advice.  In this case, having second opinions did pay off.  I, too, like the new arrangement.
 
@ Tim - Thank you so much for having a listen.  I can't say enough for all you guys.

 Lynn this was a real creative endeavor. In order to  convey the message, make it understandable and musically relevant to the listener is a real challenge. I think you hit a home run on all those points.

Lynn, That's much better sounding with what you have done on this alternative version. I was even bobbing my head along with it. I knew something was lacking in the other version and the drum beat and sound must have been it. Nicely done. Liked it.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

@ Tim (aka Starise) - Thank you for your generous praise.  That makes my day.
 
@ John - It sure helps to have so many golden ears helping me with this.  I, too, didn't realize how much better it could be until I heard the difference.  The beauty of it was that it took about 2 minutes to make that change.  This is a lesson I'll carry with me on future projects.

Nailed it!
 
Regards,
Dan
 

@ Dan - Thank you!  It was your explanation that turned on the light for me.

Yeah, sometimes when people's noses are somewhere other than (well you know... "What can Brown do for you today?") It can help quite a bit! 
 
Of course it also feels pretty good when they are, well you know? Both can be helpful... Noses in different places? (There's a song in there somewhere.) However, "ears" and different perspective I agree is what can be most valuable here.
 
The stroking of the ego is good too! But too much stroking can lead to premature infatuation? And, we all want to prolong our infatuation if possible, and don't want to enjoy it prematurely? But rather, "when it is time." Infatuation based on the critiques of our performances of course? When the time is right, that's when it's best... I'm glad you got a better final mix :-D That's more important that other thing?

Robbie, thanks for your thoughtful reply.  It's always interesting to hear what you have to say even when I have no clue what you're talking about.  People who put question marks after statements generally leave me confused.  But, thanks again.

nice one
sounds like 80`s
so many varies and that's good
nicely combined
it has all what a good song needs.
All the Best
 

Thanks K, it's nice to hear from you and your positive remarks.  I appreciate your time.