Nice song. I like the writing effort you obviously put into this.
The song does has some issues to my ears. It does seem to be compressed too much. Over all and some of the individual instruments such as the drums (to my ears) .... I also hear a harshness in the vocal track that is high end related and makes it sound strange since it's not balanced properly.
GO back to the tracks and shut off the compressors. Pull the EQ on the vocals down on the high end. You need the top end to be rounded off so the harshness is not there but at the same time be sure it has air.....easier to do than to explain.
On my music I tend to not use much compression at all. Just a mild compression on the master bus output....
BTW:
Don't feel bad that the agency didn't assist you in any way shape or form. I had a similar experience with a song I wrote.
Give Me A Chance
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10977017 a song that was written specifically for our local Pro-Life group which aided un-wed teen moms through the funding they received from churches, individuals, and community businesses. I signed the license for them for use in their advertising and in their fund raising events/video. I spoke with the director of the group and found out they never used the song ..... yep, not even one time. I even contacted other similar agencies across my state and in several other states.... not one single group wanted to license the song and I was offering it at no cost. It really makes you wonder....am I missing something here?
Oh yeah.... the director was renting a house from me and in one of our conversations mentioned what she did for a living.... and then the talk turned to music and her problem with trying to find music that she could license for the fundraising events they do....I offered to write a song for the group...... when she heard this song, she loved it and actually wiped a tear.... so I don't have a clue why it wasn't ever used. I guess that's just how it goes...