Well, it's a first mix. ;)
The snare and kick are way out front and should be dropped back into the mix a bit. Since the drumming is so out front it becomes apparent that there are also some performance issues in the rhythm (and/or possibly some inaccurate clip editing during production?), with kick and snare hits being a little off time and overlapping in a few different places. Sounds like you may have even left a few spots where there are two drum parts playing simultaneously (and not quite in sync).
In general I think you really scooped the low-mid frequencies out of all your bed tracks, which does make plenty of room for the lead vocals, but there's very little "meat" left to the music. The bass sounds like a "sub bass", and the electric rhythm guitar is barely there. I'd suggest adding back some of those low-mid freqs in the range of 100-1000 Hz.