Congrats on your selection for the bandcamp song contest!  I'm not a metal guy (mellowing in recent years), but you obviously know your craft and execute it well.  Kudos!

Lyrics can either float on top or w/in the rest of the music.  Within pulls you into the soundscape (hopefully).  It works for me, is in line w/ other songs in this genre and you seem to have you reasons lined up like ducks.
 
Real rocker, to boot.  sounds great.
 
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Lyrics can either float on top or w/in the rest of the music.  Within pulls you into the soundscape (hopefully).  It works for me, is in line w/ other songs in this genre and you seem to have you reasons lined up like ducks.
 
Real rocker, to boot.  sounds great.
 
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hey very cool you worded it perfectly!! 'w/in the rest of the music' also my vox can get nasally/snarly and if too loud to my ears i'm like "SHUT UP" to myself lol i think the natural harmonics in my overtones cut though enough so you hear the presence of vocals entirely - as to the particular words i kinda always liked going to the lyrics to read them etc.. :) - thanks for listen!! - Daren 

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Congrats on your selection for the bandcamp song contest!  I'm not a metal guy (mellowing in recent years), but you obviously know your craft and execute it well.  Kudos!

hey thanks for that, bro!! I'm more mellow too. I think we all need to do that ;) - Daren 

MakeShift
Daren,
 
Everything you have posted to date has thoroughly impressed me.  Excellent work on this song.  I agree that I would turn up the vocals just a touch.  
 
As you had said in the thread on lyrics, "the best lyrics don't say anything definitive-they just temporarily liberate us from the limited ways in which we think and feel."  Well, you nailed it then with these.  I could study these lyrics for days.

xactly. thanks. i try to tell people to not think too deeply about the lyrics and let them mean what you want them to mean/think they mean. art can't exist in a vacuum - it needs an audience, not a definition... :) 
 
- Daren