Hello, everyone!  Personal matters have kept me busy this summer (all good), so I haven't been around much, but in between events, I wrote this song just after the 4th of July.  I'm trying out some new techniques both in recording and mixing, so I thought that I'd put this up for some feedback.  I hope you enjoy, and I want to thank all of you in advance for taking the time to listen.  Hope you are all having a good and productive summer.
 
"The Moon In Her Eyes" can be found here: https://soundcloud.com/lynn-wilson-4/the-moon-in-her-eyes
 
The updated version (9-12-13) can be found here:http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?q=hi&songID=12439692
 
 

Hi Lynn. It's a nice song. Almost has a Caribbean feel to it. Sounds like a good mix. It might just be me, but I'm hearing some phase issues in the vocals between 2:30 and 2:40. I like the song though. Nice job!

gave me a "love boat" vibe :-) Always a love song from you, that's nice Lynn. Made me think of the Marx Bros from the movie "The coconuts" where Groucho said, "We'll meet in the garden at midnight, I can see it now, you and the moon, you and the moon... You wear a necktie so I'll know you." 

Nice song here Lynn. Keeps you wiggling in your chair and bobbing your head. Nice sound and mix. Good job on the vocals. Lots of great textures happing throughout. Like it.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

Bob, thanks for your reply.  The Caribbean feel is the shuffle beat from Superior Drummer that I wrote the song around.  As for the phasing issue in the second verse, that may be the harmony being slightly out of tune with the lead.  I'll check that out.
 
Robbie, it is indeed a love song.  They say write what you know, and I have a personal connection to this story.  I remember that Marx Bros. movie well, and I thank you for the comparison.
 
John, I'm happy you like the song.  Your words always mean a lot to me.

Lynn,
 
Cool song, quite enjoyable.   I feel like it is lacking a bit on the bottom end though.   The percussion maybe high-passed a bit too high or something?   I like your production on this track quite a bit.  Very good.

Regards

markno999
Lynn,
 
Cool song, quite enjoyable.   I feel like it is lacking a bit on the bottom end though.   The percussion maybe high-passed a bit too high or something?   I like your production on this track quite a bit.  Very good.

Regards

Mark, I think you may have a valid point on the low end.  The drums are "as is", but I'll revisit them, too.

This is a lively tune... I think if I were going to change anything, it would be the addition of a bridge, or middle eight, with less busy bass & synth... something to break it up, and add some interesting contrast... I'd also like to hear a little more lows on the kick...
Very cool lyrics and your distinctive singing make this very appealing... Great work Lynn...     

Frank, I'm going to take you up on more lows from the bass drum.  I like your idea on the bridge, but rather than stick one in this song, I would prefer to write a new song with a different structure.  However, you never know.  This song is still open, and in order to keep it from being too long I will think hard about this.  Thanks for taking the time, and  congratulations on your new CD.

Hello Lynn
All i can say is
LIKE IT!!!