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Edited: listened again this morning with fresh ears ...
Much better on the too-hot levels... Snare could be mixed up slightly...
Crash Cymbal seems over used (too repetitive), and is decaying too quick... blend in a couple different, good sounding crash samples, and use sparingly... Just my take... Very cool tune...
 

Frank, thanks for listening yet again to this song and your good advice.  I remixed it this morning and took out some of the cymbals, changed the sample, and boosted the snare a bit.  To my ears, those were all good changes and they improve the song.  I may be honing in on this, at last, but I've heard it so frequently that I may not see the forest for the trees, yet.  

Crash sounds better... I do agree with Rik about the abrupt beginning... Try copying a quick drum fill from somewhere later in the song, and paste it in at the beginning... I think that would help a lot...
BTW, I've caught myself singing this tune to myself a few times lately...

Frank, I'll give that a try.  Thanks for listening again.  Your advice has spurred me on.

Hey Lynn,
 
 The second mix is a real improvement in clarity here on my end. I commend you for wading out into new waters with mix techniques. Whatever you're doing it works well. I can tell you put real feeling into the song. As always your vocals are very good. I like your guitar additions too.
 
 Hope you can make it back here on a more regular basis.

Nice job - great vocals.  The song flows very well.  I like the guitar soloing.  I agree with the kick drum needing more bottom end, and maybe a louder snare as well.  Great rhythmical textures.

@Starise - Thanks, Tim, for the kind words.  I hope to be back here more often once I take care of some personal business.  I'm glad you like the mix which is partially due to the Focusrite VRM box that I purchased a few months ago.
 
@ Geno - Thanks for taking the time to listen and respond.  I'm a big fan of yours, and your words carry a lot of weight with me.  I did remix this with your suggestions in mind and posted it today.  It can be found here:http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?q=hi&songID=12439692, or in the first post.  BTW, I love your instrumental that you have up, and I'll respond to it later when I have more time.
 
To all newcomers to this forum, this is the kind of help that one can expect from here.  So many golden ears and so much good advice!

double post, oops.

fantastic panning
now it sounds much better
it has more atmosphere now.
when i listened to the first version the instruments were seperated but now they are flowing together.
Lynn once again you are a great Artist
even a hip hop head like me listens to your MUSIC ;-)
 

Well Lynn, Now you have gone and done it, you brought this full circle and it is absolutely awesome my man. This really holds your attention all the way through and sparkles with delight, poise and captivating to the mind. Great job on this new mix. Lots of things happening all the way through with some great textures. I love this. Wonderful work here folks.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

I was talking to a woman who once recounted how much she enjoyed the moon through her eyes, and I have to say with some immodest pride? It was after "an episode" where I was on shameless display on the hotel balcony with her gazing up from the boardwalk below... (it was a warm night and I thought the room lights were dim enough?)