Thanks Lynn, blipp. I've been meaning to get back into Jitter and make a video so this will probably happen, I think you're right Lynn it could be more compact and probably better for it. I got half way through producing it and didn't feel like I could face going back and re-arranging an umpteenth time.
You're right blipp, I think when I come back to it I'll attack the drums with a sampler and try and inject some percussive variation. I kind of realised I'd got stuck in a loop and then tried to apply the dub delay to create some variation. I think it probably needs one or two more elements that can come in and out.
Cheers for the tips, I'll come back to it and apply some more polish once I've taken a break and made something else (I've heard it too many times now - it's driven me mental).