Lou Reed, Leonard Cohen...that's some good company! What I hear is early Floyd. Good stuff, whatever the simile.
No real criticisms at all, but if I was your producer, some ideas I'd toss out for your consideration:
- Substitute an Italian transistor organ for the strings
- Add some ambiance generally, and to the drums specifically
- Pan the BGVs out of the lead vox's way
- A long, subtle delay on the guitar
- Some distant percussion, e.g. shakers and tambourine
But don't touch that great lead vox!