http://soundcloud.com/ron-vogel/my-precious (edit new link) 
A song I wrote as a diversion...wife wanted a "love" song...here you go..lol
 
Really is a quick demo. I just DI'd the guitars, and put up an sm57 and laid down all the vox in one evening. Some rough spots here and there...and I think is needs a little quicker tempo. When I record the parts the right way, I'm thinking of adding a jam after the last lyric; since this tune is crying for an epic guitar solo.
 
I would love to her some critiques on the songwriting!

Wow.....really brilliant writing man!
A really soulful rock piece with some funk.
Great song all the way around.

Nice start Ron. This sounds like you might have a good one going here and the vocals sound like your telling her what you feel. Keep it going.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

Ron, I'm having the same problem I had with Tony's song.  The Sound cloud player doesn't work whe I click the arrow.  I'm gonna reboot I guess.  I have listened to a bunc of songs on Soundcloud in the last couple days.  Hmmmmm.  OFF WITH IT'S POWER".  I'll let you know what happens.

Good song, Ron.  I would make that lead at 1:22 "in your face".  It would break things up a bit and it sounded good but was too low (volume) to give that full effect.   This is the basis for a great tune!

cool song with a nice classic rock feel to it. great vocal harmonies (all recorded in just one evening - respect!) I like the song as it is, but a great epic guitar solo never hurts!
 

speedtom
cool song with a nice classic rock feel to it. great vocal harmonies (all recorded in just one evening - respect!) I like the song as it is, but a great epic guitar solo never hurts!
 

Yeah, trust me the vox aren't very cleanly recorded. I left 1 track on record, set-up a desktop stand for the '57 and just stacked vocal takes over and over. After the fact I seperated them onto other tracks...tried putting them in some order.
 
I just uploaded a little better clean-up of the solo's...and tried balancing levels in mono a little better.