Not sure whats up suddenly after Robby trashed me no one has commented on my finished updated version I posted . Maybe Robby is sending out PM's behind my back asking people here to not to comment on my posted songs hell I don't know but I wouldn't put it past him after reading all his comments aimed at me recently .
 
Anyway I can't see wasting my time on lyrics & vocals if no one is interested in this new song version of NEVERLAND , I might as well say the hell with it and move on to something else .
Any comments on the music I updated and the MIX would be great , thanks - James

It's sounds good to me. Add your vocals and see what needs adjusted. A saxophone would be pretty cool in a few places.

clintmartin
It's sounds good to me. Add your vocals and see what needs adjusted. A saxophone would be pretty cool in a few places.

Hi Clint thanks for the listen , I really need to buy new monitor speakers . I'm going to ordered something in a few weeks , yea right now I'm trying to get started with some lyrics . I messed around with it using my old Neverland lyrics and it didn't sound bad but my plan is to rewrite the lyrics with something different .
A SAX your right would sound cool , I did add some trumpet in the chorus section between my two bridge sections and in the ending chorus sections and that sounded cool to me .
Maybe a SAX in each verse might be worth cheecking out , thanks for the suggestions .
 
James

 
Today I added guitar to each verse section , the music is now finished . Now my focus is on rewriting the lyrics and adding vocals to it . Heres the final new version the finished music version .
http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=12408194&q=hi&newref=1
 
Enjoy - James

 
I'm getting excited now ! After adding my new lead guitar track to both verses its fits perfect with the old NEVERLAND LYRICS , in fact the whole song sings just like the orginal song I recorded back in 2009 . The only difference is this new version sounds so much better then the old version I did back then .
 
Now all I have to do is rewrite the Lyrics and get my vocals back in shape again , I can sing the old lyrics now but right now my voice is breaking up some while singing . With some daily singing practice I hope to smooth things out so my vocals end up sounding half way decent all the way through the song .
 
Anyway right now the music is just where I wanted it to be when I started it , it's taken weeks of messing around with it but its finally all started to come together .
 
Cheers - James

 
It could use a change of chord every now and again to help create some dynamics.
 
Each section just seems to amble along before morphing into the next. It would help if you could introduce a little tension/resolution to help move the piece forward. Think of the 'classic' (but nonetheless effective) turnaround in a 12-bar blues, or the tension created by a suspended fourth chord before it resolves to the major.

SteveStrummerUK
 
It could use a change of chord every now and again to help create some dynamics.
 
Each section just seems to amble along before morphing into the next. It would help if you could introduce a little tension/resolution to help move the piece forward. Think of the 'classic' (but nonetheless effective) turnaround in a 12-bar blues, or the tension created by a suspended fourth chord before it resolves to the major.

Thanks but each verse has four chords in it and the chorus section has another three chords in each chords totally out at seven chords for the verses & chorus sections only then another three chords for the bridge section thats a total of  TEN chords for the whole song . Also theres a mix of three finger & four finger chords throughout the song .
I'm really happy with the song the way it is but hey you have your likes and dislikes nothing wrong with that , I'm pleased with all elements and the work I put into the music I created from the orginal song I created back in 2009 .
Another thing is I have already recorded some vocals using the old lyrics and it works perfectly , the lead guitar and all the other song elements all fit perfectly with the old lyrics .
My plan is to take the old lyrics and change the words but sing it the same way as before , just haven't gotten that far yet but I'm working on it .
 
Thanks for your thoughts but I have a GREEN LIGHT in my mind & ears -James