Hey I needed some listeners with that recent song sample I posted , you were right it needed so much work I decided to delete all my tracks except for my drum track and my percussion tracks .
This is what I created today , completely different . I added a nice Bass track , some light electric guitar and a nice chorus violin .
The piano track I redid also and added a nice PAD sound to go with it , I'm pretty sure I got the MIX right but you be the judge if you don't mine listening to what I have going on now .
I also renamed my song , its now called OCEAN OF TEARS . 
http://nightfoxmusic.bandcamp.com/track/ocean-of-tears
 
I'm greatfull for all postive feedback and suggestions thanks -James
 

Sounds good. Suggestions, try bringing up the mids with the Pro Channel EQ. Try placing a low pass filter on the bottom end. Swing the piano to a bus and put in a slight chorus effect on it, Cakewalk FX Chorus, Big Stereo Spread. Clone and pan a bit. Then add some guitar solo! FREE

Not a bad start James.

The mix definitely needs work, it all sounds a bit muddy. Maybe try out Randy's suggestions, it might help to clean things up a bit.

As far as the structure goes, it needs to go somewhere. You need to change direction once or twice to maintain interest, as it stands, it's almost like an eight-bar loop on repeat.

And maybe try and build up the piece a bit - for example you could hold off on bringing the drums or the piano in until a bit later to help move things along.

How's the guitar playing coming along?

SteveStrummerUK


Not a bad start James.

The mix definitely needs work, it all sounds a bit muddy. Maybe try out Randy's suggestions, it might help to clean things up a bit.

As far as the structure goes, it needs to go somewhere. You need to change direction once or twice to maintain interest, as it stands, it's almost like an eight-bar loop on repeat.

And maybe try and build up the piece a bit - for example you could hold off on bringing the drums or the piano in until a bit later to help move things along.

How's the guitar playing coming along?

         My guitar its coming along , heres my last new song with some guitar lead
         in it  . Its not the best lead but hey its a months worth of playing as
         a beginner guitar player .
         http://soundcloud.com/nightfoxmusic
 
         Thanks for the listen on this new upcoming song , I was just noodlying
         around on the piano its not whe real thing . I only posted this to get
         some feedback on the mix and on the piano track .
         I'll have to try Randys suggestion and see how I can improve the mix ,
         Thanks for the listen and comments .
 
         James

Theycallmefree


Sounds good. Suggestions, try bringing up the mids with the Pro Channel EQ. Try placing a low pass filter on the bottom end. Swing the piano to a bus and put in a slight chorus effect on it, Cakewalk FX Chorus, Big Stereo Spread. Clone and pan a bit. Then add some guitar solo! FREE

         Thanks Randy I will give that a try and see what happens , thanks for
          that FREE advice something I haven't tried before . I'll let you know
          later how the CAKE turns out , hopefully it doesn't burst into flames ! LOL
 
          James

As the guys said on Crossfire, it could use some direction.

I like Little Abbey. The nice thing about being a beginner guitar player is that you don't over play it. The parts fit perfectly in there. 

Scottytunes


As the guys said on Crossfire, it could use some direction.

I like Little Abbey. The nice thing about being a beginner guitar player is that you don't over play it. The parts fit perfectly in there. 

         Thanks Scotty your right about direction something I was still working
         on , I was more or less noodlying around on the keyboard thats all
         so I would have something on the piano track for you guys to listen to .
         Randys suggestions sound like a solid plan of attack , thanks everyone
         for the feedback on the MIX on this new song I'm working on .
 
         Thanks Scotty I'll never be as good as you on the guitar but maybe in
          a year or two I can play good enough to work with all my songs as
          I create them .
 
          Thanks -James

I think you play good enough now!

Thanks everyone for your feedback and suggestions , time to get back to work on this new song and turn it into something good .

Back when its finished thanks -James

Thanks guys I did listen on my last sample , THIS IS ALL NEW .
Its called OCEAN OF TEARS .

http://soundcloud.com/nightfoxmusic