If you have the means to record (and you obviously have), invest in a cheap keyboard. If you can hear a tune in your head you can pick it out on a piano by trial and error.

Unless you can sing on pitch and in key (which it appears you cannot), trying to get your ideas across to someone else like this is a monumental, if not impossible task.

I don't have the time or inclination to do anything with this......

However, Dave (aka Quantumeffect)  did the hard work already. 

Now... auto tune the vox, throw down a bass groove, some sampled strings and  a wawa guitar, and you would have something...... 

perhaps not what the OP hears in his head as "powerful" but something none the less.


I can not count the times when I have started writing something I hear in my head, and as I go through the process of getting it out of my head and down to paper or the DAW..... the end result is NOTHING like what I heard BUT..... it still ends up being an enjoyable song and writing experience. 

Well....IMO... I gave a listen to all three and here's my take on it. I agree with Guitarhacker: "Man.... how do you translate that into a song? I have no idea. It sounds to me like an exercise in total frustration for someone other than you to try to produce that song that you hear in your head." I don't mean to discourage the OP's vision but I find the effort far too raw and vague. I may be daft but I'm not feeling any of the terms you use in the current renditions. (IE 'happy tune'...'intense action') As others have suggested learning to play some instruments within Sonar(rather than the annoying do-doos)to convey your vision would be much more appropriate/effective. Although you know what you are trying to accomplish the way you've presented it could make it difficult for some on initial listen, including me, to take it seriously. Respectfully....good luck. (damn..don't know why the text came out this way)

This thread is gettin on my nerve 

All I know is this song makes me happy.  No mater what anyone says about this tune it is an arrangement of sounds in time and that my friends makes it a piece of music.  GOOD LUCK, Matt!


Kev

I would really like this on my cell phone as a ring tone.

http://youtu.be/tMwhl4IrPNc

Lookin lack a foo wit cho pants onna ground!

That's it bro.

Scottytunes


Lookin lack a foo wit cho pants onna ground!

Now, do it Gangnam style! I saw the live performance on the AMAs last night and "Can't Touch Gangnam" with guest MC Hammer

Scottytunes


Do do do doot dooooo
Do do do doot dooooo

See? Catchy, no?