I know there is alot to do but now feedback is needed!!! i want you to enjoy the music :-) http://soundcloud.com/skeletor-beats/dedicated Thanx

Update!!! Now longer version

not bad , but you need a vocal for this music genre !!
in any case the track need a punch in drum session and more stereo emphasis.

Ciao 
elix  

nice piece.
a lot of little hooks in there placed creatively.
however needs some thump, it is thin and frail.

I know you said no feedback,
sorry I don't get it, I thought that's what this forum was for.?

@elix Thanx for listening. Vocals??? yep it really needs Vocals :-) @Chucke I am really really sorry. I don't want to hurt any feelings here at the Forum. People at cake forum are always very kind to me but the melody is already drawn in my Head and i don't want to be influenced from outside. i just want you to enjoy the music and of course i am happy when you leave a comment such as good or bad but that's it. i will rename the thread. Once again thanx for listening

no probs,

the one thing I never do is tell someone where melody's belong.
good or bad, its their song,(its like their child )
its more of a mix issues I like feedback with, atleast in my personal experiences.
I enjoy feedback because its an outside ear that hears things my fatigue cant.
something happens to our songs after writing them we become prone to ignore certain aspects of the frequency unless we step outside for a while.

those are the things I enjoy feedback on.

melody's, those shouldn't be judged, im not sure I have heard anyone in the song forum suggest musical changes.
its one one of those things that's like telling a painter to use different colors, rather than suggesting where to sell your painting.

at any rate, I liked your piece it was very good.
and I understand your stance :)

Well, I did listen but I didn't enjoy that much because it seemed "thin and repetitive".  That's not meant as an insult!  It just means that imo it needs a lot of work.  So, I am not critiquing.  You said to enjoy the music and I'm telling you why that is more easily said than done.  I think that down the line you could beef it up but the melody line (that which you don't want to change) just doesn't have any balz.  That might change once you add your stuff.  I will look for that version.  Also, to make a longer version of a song that has very few melody changes seems, well, strange.  If you change the name let us know that it was this song.  You are fairly new here and I think I have heard some of your stuff and liked it.  Keep 'em coming.

@Chucke You seem to know what i am talking about :-) It's really like a apart of the Soul. Usually i look for feedback on my mixes too but in this case it was (Dedicated) so it has got to be produced by me without any kind of help. (a personal thing) I have spent one and an half day so far so it's logical that it needs more time and Hard work. I don't know how fast other producers do work. but this is how i do. and once again Thanx for taking the time for posting. and i am really happy to hear that that you liked it. :-) @evadianepug Ok I c as we all know it's a matter of taste. so i don't take it personal. and you are absolutly right i don't want to change the riddim Because i love repetive things wich have to be catchy for almost 3-4 mins. i could easily compose 64/128 even 256 but there would be lame (boring) sections. that's why i don't like classical music ala bach and co i guess i am one of those who think LESS is More :-) Repetive and of course i will let you know when i should change the name but i think Dedicated is Good Thanks for being honest and leaving this critcizm. I wish you all the best

Update!!! half of the work done :-)

Listened to the update and it sounds     quite nice melodically, but it needs a lot more development to keep it interesting.  Therer needs to be some break or diversion from the main theme  as it gets a bit monotomous after a while.

I picked up my guitar while it was playing and had an enjoyable jam along with it.

Hope you can develop and expand on this and maybe add some vocals as this has potential.