The snare might work better with a tighter groove if you ditched some of the room on it. Also, the hats on the right side is a bit different; I would do a eq dip at 4k to take some of the biting edge off.
Vocals need a bit more sparkle and a ton more compression, as I strained to hear you against everything else.
Other than that, I loved everything about it, Lynn.
I also have a oval scrimshaw on my wallet that my wife bought for me on our last trip to Martha's Vineyard!