Really cool foundation, looking forward to hearing what becomes of it

Thanks ohgrant! I appreciate it.

I edited the first post but here is the link for an updated version.

https://soundcloud.com/ro-34/bonk

I put a scratch vox on it and added a change. All the empty space is where a lead will be eventually. I took away the droning bass notes as it cluttered the low end. The drums are still not done. It depends on the leads on how I add fills or change things. It's still a wip so again, comments are welcome.
I haven't been around much lately. My mom recently had a stroke and I was visiting her back in Ohio. I'm not sure how to feel right now as I'm not sure she is there. She seems to respond (she can't talk) but it's unclear. I think it's harder seeing her like she is rather than her just dying. Sorry if that sounds cold but as I said, I'm not sure how I feel yet. I just talked to her and told her what was going on in my life.

The drums needs more punch and maybe add more percussion elements like a shaker and clap.  I think the slow talk is a great direction and please keep on it.  

It is what it is. I really didn't know what to think. I guess the title pretty much tell the story. You may want to rethink this one and get the singing parts down before the remake. Just my opinion, which is what it is.

Peace be with you. Blessings, John

Thanks for checking it out Vicente. The drums are a work in progress as I said. I'm not finished writing this an I usually save the fills and other colors for last.

I appreciate you taking the time to comment John. As I said, the vocals are just scratch for now. I may keep the verses, re-record them, as they are but the break definitely needs singers as I want 3 part harmony. I will never claim to be a singer but that does not mean I won't try and get the idea across.