Lynn


James, this is a short, but sweet piece of music.  I enjoyed the listen, but I think the mix could come up in volume somewhat.  It's very smooth, but there's not much tension and  release.  But, kudos to all involved for writing good parts.

Thanks Lynn. The track is un-mastered as yet, so there's room for some more volume.

markno999


James, 
 
I do like the song.   I listened yesterday and again today.   The song itself it really good, I like the melody guitar tones, etc...  I found something about it distracting and it took a few listens to put my finger on it.    I think what you have are some timing issues, it is apparent when the drums first come in with the piano.   It is mixed well and is certainly an enjoyable listen but to my ears the rhytmn section just is not together and it detracts from the overall performance.   By the time the drums get more prevalent and active in the mix towards the end it does come together.   I am a fan..
 
Regards

Thanks Mark. The general consensus is a distraction with the drums, and I have a feeling the track may breathe a little easier without them. I'll experiment and see.

 Cool stuff guys, I enjoyed

I like the drum rhythms, but the sounds you chose for them: not so much. Especially in the first part where the snare thing sounds like a clipped wav edit.

There are real moments of beauty here, but it does come across kinda disjointed. The bass is fine I think, but it sounds too prominent and upfront for this track. Maybe grab some fundamentals and low pass the rest. Then there wouldn't be so much contention with the rest.

The piano could stand to be pushed back a tad with some reverb, 

blipp


Very nice composition James and an interesting arrangement that keeps your attention. 

You always have great tones coming from your guitars and this one is no exeption. Very enjoyable melodically too.

I have to agree with markno though about the occasional timing errors of the percussion and it did distract me a few times.

Overall though a very well crafted piece of work.

Thanks a lot John. I'm taking these comments on board, and will be revisiting the percussion in the track.

notnat

markno999


James,  
  
I think what you have are some timing issues, it is apparent when the drums first come in with the piano.  

I noticed this too James... I love the arrangement, and the performances, but not so much the drums..
you mentioned revisiting them... I think you should...  Very cool music and production otherwise...
Well done guys...

Frank, thanks very much as always..yep..the drums..(makes cutting motion across throat) 

drumstixkev


I love the flow of this piece.  I don't know if its the  drums or the space the drums are sitting in that throws me off.  GREAT colab looking forward to hearing more of your project.


Kev

Cheers Kev!

Scottytunes


That worked out nicely.

Thanks Scotty!

CLEAN


Beautiful song - great playing. I love this a lot.

Hey, thanks Mark, glad you liked it so much.

Old55


A fine job all around.  

Thank you Jan!