You are my new music for today. I suggest big ass bass hits on the ones and threes.
first 8 bars build, 8 to 16 bars let it ride like you have but with the big ass bass hits.
then do a break down bring down to just the drums, every 8 measures add new elements, till the whole thing is in swing.
at the end leave 16 to 32 measures of just drums.
I like the way you took that criticism from Band19. It shows that you can be worked with, thats important for musicians.
Ya you have to change the name I was looking for zepplin also.
I would also suggest starting a new one.
Peace Freind