David, this is an outstanding song. You have some skills. The production is not too bad. The only real complaint is the vocals run flat when you drop to the lower register, which harms an otherwise highly creative and fun song. The skill shown in the rest of the vox demonstrate that its just a matter of practice, not a lack of ability. Focus on your song writing and performances, and find yourself an engineer. You are young enough to actually make a go with music, and I encourage you to follow through. You have some of the most potential of I yet heard on this forum. Polished up I would buy this song, and I almost never say that.