Janet, Here is a technique I've used when writing lyrics. When constructing a line, when you get to what you feel will be the last word of that line, think about what's going to rhyme with that word. For instance, the first line of your song ends with "you". This is when you should be thinking about what rhymes with it. "True, blue, etc. This can not only help you write the 3rd line, but might key you into what will work for the 2nd line which ends with "again". With that being a 2 syllable word, you can use 2 words to make the rhyme work, such as "my friend", or another 2 syllable word such as "begin" etc. It's really a craft to write original, effective lyrics. You are off to a good start, but I'm pretty confident if you put the effort into working on them the way you have with your playing, composing and mixing over the last few years, you're gonna do fine. Randy

"but I realized last night that the range is way too big for any normal person."


Who said I'm a normal person?

Thanks Steve!

Thanks Randy.  Yeah, I sorta do that too. I love being able to Google 'what rhymes with...'  After a while you have the obvious ones down.  ;)

Robby...no offense...I really didn't mean to say you were a normal person.  I mean, that would be, you know, just too hard to imagine! 

Hi Janet.  Good for you --- you're trying out your hand in lyric writing.  Looks like you have made a good start and received some great advice.  Once site that I have found helpful for finding rhymes is http://www.rhymer.com/ .  However, at times I find that the number of rhymes that they give for some words can be overwhelming.
 

Hi Janet whats the name of the music , is it the first song on your soundclick list of song or music ?
If its the first song listed I like it very nice , your music is always enjoyable to listen to .

Maybe I have been working on my new computer too many hours but I don't see a song title related to the lyrics you posted .

James

Thanks Freddy!

James, I haven't recorded anything yet.  It's just the lyrics here.  

You don't have to rhyme necessary as poetry in general is/can also be free verse (No rhyme or reason haha)

I'm arranging a track and I would like some lyrics for the part I added (the established always has them obviously); yet, maybe they aren't need.

I'd do the same thing lyrically as you would musically. Just rattle off stuff. I think where folks get in trouble in thinking too hard. Herb's in another thread regarding a user's track who's not sure where to go. (You know which, Herb)

I remember a tune for my sister's band where in the jam session, we just did random stuff. We did the "musical chain" (One person does this, the other does this and hopefully it connects, and so on). Once we'd laid the music down, my sis just sang about something silly. (I think the first line was: "It's 3am or something like that). Eventually, this turned into a real song with much better lyrics (not that we didn't put in the effort to come up with them, but we didn't think too hard.)

So, just go with whatever flows. If something doesn't work, don't scrap it. Save it for something else whether it be another part in the same song or a completely different one. (And don't be afriad to use repetition because it does help. Remember the Canon, Take Five, ... Exception examples. The latter two have lyrics, the former (at least to my knowledge) does not 

Janet


Thanks Freddy!

James, I haven't recorded anything yet.  It's just the lyrics here.  
 
Hi Janet guess my mind is still in computer shock mode trying to reinstall my drum software thats been giving me big problems reinstalling on my new computer .
 
I never had any luck writing my lyrics frist I always created my music first but thats just me , can't wait to hear the lyrics & the music .
 
James

James, the music's written.  The first line came to me pretty much like it is here...with the music.  The rest of it flowed from that, but the words are harder.

Janet


James, the music's written.  The first line came to me pretty much like it is here...with the music.  The rest of it flowed from that, but the words are harder.

You're not alone in that dept., but that's why I don't call myself a poet ( though I used to write some) or lyricist (not a good one anyway)