I like the overall feel and the pacing is very nice.
The mix is way too loud and low end EQ is pretty thick.
The music is good so I'd recommend a quick remix with the levels lowered and some low end cloudiness pulled out with EQ.
I downloaded your .wav file and did a quick analysis:
Left Right
Min Sample Value: -32768 -32768
Max Sample Value: 32767 32767
Peak Amplitude: 1.06 dB 1.15 dB
Possibly Clipped: 514594 630995 DC Offset: -12.951 -14.188 Minimum RMS Power: -28.35 dB -32.23 dB
Maximum RMS Power: -2.79 dB -2.82 dB
Average RMS Power: -7.4 dB -7.06 dB
Total RMS Power: -7.12 dB -6.8 dB
Actual Bit Depth: 16 Bits 16 Bits
Using RMS Window of 50 ms
If you turn things down in your mix until you have zero rather than 500,000 to 600,000 possible clipped samples it will sound a whole lot better and your concept about how you treated the music will be much easier to appreciate.
Also, your DC offset is
huge.
It's very common to see a DC Offset of 0.01 thru 0.10 but something like 12 or 14 is off the charts and a real head turner.
It may just be symptomatic of the file being crushed with the 500,000 overs... I'd check and correct the DC offset after a remix and see what is going on with that... if it's still there you'll want to go further back and search out the cause of it and fix it.
very best regards,
mike