@M@B

Thanks for listening and appreciating! I'm confused about the word "Pumpkiny" though?

Anyway i figured the drums might be a tad too loud, maybe a 1db notch down wouldn't hurt, especially the snare and toms.

I really liked the music but couldn't hear any lyrics at all.  I'm on good monitors so, maybe it's just me.  I like the tune.

Here's a Jesus and Mary Chain track from "Automatic"... Also find their song "Just Like Honey".... Mmmmmhmmm, yes.  I think "pumpkiny" refers to Smashing Pumpkins... An apt description. :)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eGp47YwDZ48

@All
I've updated the mix.
http://soundcloud.com/theauralith/severed-vesper-space-1 
The issues pointed out have been tweaked, but i won't tell what i did so that any psychological factors with knowing what changed won't occur. Thank you again!

@Warren
Thanks so much! Although, like i said, the lyrics are intended not to be understood properly.

@Julie
Ohh, this seems cool! I'm trying to find a couple more songs of theirs to absorb them better.

Hey Miggy Nice to hear you doing some rock again. I am also a big shoegaze fan, both the original stuff (Chapterhouse, Ride, MBV etc) and the current BM crossover thing of bands like Alcest and Les Discrets. Vocals still need to come up a lot, but I like the riffs you have hear. mix is ok, a bit too much verb on the solos at times.

Ok, now that I'm over the initial "I love this song" phase... You COULD pull the vox up a bit. I dont mean a lot.  Just a bit.  May be an automation thing... Sometimes it's ok, sometimes too far back.  It would probably mean carving out some space in the wall of guitars, but ok.  The other thing... In the guitar solo... It's getting a little lost in the verb. and it's a good solo... So, yeah, I agree with mgh, here. At 3:05... I'm not sure I DISlike the slightly off tune vox, but it keeps sticking out at me... Not blending... I don't always hear that stuff in my own mixes, so I'm pointing it out.  


Every time those guitars slam in.... It's Awesome.

@mark and julibee
Thanks so much for helping me out with this. I've brought up (automated) the vocals a bit (i'm really not comfortable with raising it even more), then i've removed a little bit of reverb on the solos (still very wet, i just prefer that vibe) and added stereo depth (i realized the leads were quite mono because a plug-in; bypassed it, it went stereo), and most importantly i corrected that pitchy vocal line (thank you so much Julie for pointing that out, it was indeed popping out.)

Thank you so much again for everybody's help! I hope this mix is "the one" to go:
http://soundcloud.com/theauralith/severed-vesper-space-3rd-mix

YEP.  :)

Hi there Miggy

Love the song, great job all round
 
Top notch solo, fits the feel of the tune perfectly.