This is from just listening on some ear buds on my desktop at work (shhhh)... Very nice progression of chords. I certainly can relate to spending a lot of time going over and over a mix or just a certain portion of one.....and having to walk away for a while. One can easily get OCD about this stuff... I would like to hear some more parts that are softer, such as bringing down the strong rhythm guitar and put in some piano or acoustic-electric guitar melody / short riffs that are some variation of the main melody - knid of like you do near the end. Somewhere lost in there, maybe more towards the end I am hearing some keyboard part - but not sure what it is. This being a pretty long song (near 5 1/2 min ), I think that without some dynamic changes as suggested it could be tough to listen to all the way...unless you consider shortening it.  

Drums sound great (though a bit brittle on the high side with those cymbals). Could use some room reverb on the verses.
Guitar is a bit too mono-y for me. Maybe get a room reverb and shade it over to a side.
There is bass on this? ;) Honestly it is a felt more than heard. Compress the holy hell out of it and get cutting on the eq.
That synth thing at 3:30 or so is a great idea. Though I hear some meager claps in the mix that I don't think should be there.
Overall, good tune, but unless you have some American Pie-like lyrics, the listener (even if it your girl) is gonna get bored. Cut it down at least to 4:00.

Hey guys thanks for the great suggestions.  I am concerned about the length of the song as you all are.  I think it might be a good idea to cut the second chorus in half and not repeat it as it is repeated now.  But anyways, I'm starting a new thread on Gearslutz because I just recorded vocals last night and would love some feedback.  I mixed it quick and hadn't done any mastering EQ yet, but let me know what you all think so I can get started on the right foot.  Thanks for all your help.  Here's the link to the song:

http://www.gearslutz.com/board/work-progress-advice-requested-show-tell-artist-showcase-mix-offs/761355-original-rock-ballad-im-proposing-my-girlfriend.html#post8239139

Jonathan,
 
Good so far, as JameYoYo said, you need to get some space/stereo field on the guitars but pretty good stuff.

Hey thanks Mark...I'll definitely work on that.  I appreciate the feedback.

Jonathan, I just replied to your PM, but now I'll make this public.  I liked the tune before the vocals were done, but the vocal tracks elevate this to another level.  Jamesyoyo gave you some good advice, and it sounds like you took it and ran.  The overall mix sounds better than ever on my speakers, and the vocal production is top notch.  Your girlfriend should be quite pleased with this.  I'm sure that all of us here would like to hear more from you.  Thanks for sharing.

Hey Lynn.  That's awesome to hear, thank you so much for taking the time out to critique my song.  I'm glad it's translating across the board pretty well.  I'm gonna let my ears rest for a while and then come back to it and hopefully be able to perfect it.  Thanks again for all the kind words!

-Jonathan

Anyone else have any feedback?

It is nice ---- Today I took a listen on my computer at work, with some small rather cheap buds and the only thing I noticed was your vocal seemed almost drowned out by the strong guitars--- but it may have been my buds, and there still being some background - ambient noise leaking in from the office, A/C......I really liked the clean / crisp quality overall of the recording -

i dig this a lot. total goo-goo dolls... i listened to both tracks w/out and w/ vox, nice singing - great range. seems you strain just a tad to reach the highest notes, but i'm being nit-picky. it is a great vocal. stellar really. maybe just try to open up a bit more on those peaks. 

your future wife will be pleased! 

suggestions:

stereo spread the guitars more- they seem too centered (but tone is nice- r u playing a tele?) 

bass needs more woof and sub-woof presence - mix is a little 'top heavy' to my ears 

nice track bro - great song. could be on radio tomorrow. 

-Daren