Re:on the brightside
2010/08/10 21:29:17
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I listened to yours. Then I went and found the original. Much too fast. The message couldn't sink in.
I much prefer the speed of yours. I like your vocal chorus idea better than the original's solo style. I'm not sure whether your vocal chorus isn't together, though, or whether you mean for it to kinda echo like that. Sounds good, though.
About the ending:
I know the original just cuts off--BLAM! Done!
But your version sounded so much more intimate than the original. Slow and thoughtful. I fell in love with it. And then...Blam! It's over. I didn't get to wave goodbye as it faded in the distance. Didn't have time to feel it's leaving, look back over our visit, cherish it, and long for more. Couldn't you have repeated the chorus again? Sung it slowing down to a standstill? faded out gracefully...something else?
Loved it like a woman loves sensitivity in a man. The other version was cute. It was like a cartoon illustrating life. This version was like life itself. It was real, and I felt it.
This was real art.
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