out to charm the world - closer to me

This is a fine song, for sure, but the individual elements of the song somehow don't quite blend together as one, imho.  It sounds like a number of separate parts thrown together but not quite cohering into a whole.  There are a number of reasons this could be ranging from the way you use f/x to a lack of glue, which a good compressor on the main outs could provide.  Overall, the mix had a two dimensional quality which means it lacked front to back depth.  Also, the dynamics were flat meaning that it didn't breathe much.  Finally, there wasn't much balance in the spectral range.  Everything was in the mid range level as far as frequencies go, but not much low or high end.  However, the performances were fine, and the song is good enough to get right.  Opinion may vary, but I hope you give this another try.

Good tune which is probably the first important step.

The mix etc aint too bad either but I would,
Bump up the bpm a tad,
Change the snare sounds to give more crack (sound like a wood block to me) and many of the snare notes are lagging.
The mix could do with some more dynamics, punch out the chorus a little more.
Taper that last string sample off at the end plus reverb maybe, my attention was only really brought to the fakeness of the string when I heard that at the end!

Good stuff,

Cian