"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback!

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"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback!

Looking for feedback on anything and everything.

http://soundcloud.com/hiberna/wip-02052011

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Thanks for listening (and even more for giving feedback!)
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    Janet
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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 14:40:34 (permalink)
    I really like the tune and lyrics.  Great hook too, which is important.  She's got a great voice and the mix sounds good to me.  I love the arrangement...guitar solo, drums, synth, etc. Very nice. 

    The only thing that sorta kinda bugs me is the line "be my oxygen" and I'm not sure why it bugs me cause I totally get what you're saying.  Maybe I'm just not used to hearing that word in a song.  Anyway, that's just being too nit-picky.  I'm on my second listen and really enjoy it. :-) 
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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 14:52:53 (permalink)
    Very nice. Excellent composition, very nice production and execution. I think a couple of minor things that would help- slightly lower the solo guitar and some backing vocals would help the chorus as well. Other than that it sounds great.
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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 16:31:37 (permalink)
    This sounds really good. Its well written and recorded. No nits to pick from me.

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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 17:09:12 (permalink)
    Thanks a bunch, Janet!

    I'll pass along the note about that line to the songwriter! Glad you enjoyed it!

    Agape,

    I'll look into lowering those guitars! Thanks for your feedback!

    Guitarhacker,

    That's terrific to hear! It's been fun working on it! Thanks for your input!
    post edited by hiberna - 2011/02/05 17:11:07
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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 17:13:30 (permalink)
    Overall I like it, but to nitpick

    I definitely feel like the vocals get lost a bit sometimes in the mix.   The rest of the mix sounds so full, the vocals not quite as much.  Maybe could use a bit of doubling or something.

    Also, at around 0.20 really don't like the way the voice sang "ground".   Felt laborored folowing the melody,  A little less so on "drown" around .30

    Anyway, my two cents.


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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 17:16:29 (permalink)
    Thanks, Matthew!

    I always record doubles, so I'll look into filling the vocals out a bit with them. Great idea!
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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 17:25:49 (permalink)
    Great tune; lyrics sit real well. 

    If I had to critique I think there is to much vocal swell between 1:38 - 1:42 and again right around 2:40 when she says the word love and modulates...

    Just my humble opinion

    I could hear this being played on Dalilah...

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    Janet
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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 18:39:11 (permalink)
    Instead of 'oxygen', how about 'air I breathe'? 
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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 20:46:39 (permalink)
    @listen,

    I'll take a look at that swell. I can tend to get carried away with that stuff. ;-)

    Thank you!

    @Janet,

    I'll mention that to her! Could work!

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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 21:16:42 (permalink)
    Very nice vibe.  Nice vocals.  I didn't find the vocals really getting lost on my speakers. 

    I thought the lead solo worked well.  Good use of dynamics.

    What not to like?    Well done.

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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/05 21:24:19 (permalink)
    Very radio friendly song.  Great vocal delivery. Performance and arrangement are killer. KUDOS!

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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/06 08:35:58 (permalink)
    yea....very poppy...nice work all the way round....after reading the above I got kinda wrapped around the Oxygen part and I think what's a tad awkward is the phrasing...not sure I can fully convey what I'm going to suggest but I'll try..

    The word is phased such that the punctuation seems to be on the front end ["OX" y-gen] I think I try to push the punctation to the end so that it would be [oxy "GEN"]. I know the phasing difference is slight (and might be a bit tricky) but if we could isolate the word I'm guessing that the listeners ear would accept  the verbiage/sound "gennnn" more readily "Ox-y"

    Again not sure I'm getting across what I'm hearing in me head...but I tried..lol

    In any event very good tune...shes really got a great voice and everything's where it should be (mix wise).

    Good work!
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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/06 08:45:20 (permalink)
    oxygen is a good word.
    the song is a good song.

    I think the track needs to surround the vocal better as the vocal seems to sit on top of the track.
    Or, should I say, Vocal could sit in the track better. 

    nice work.

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    Re:"Alive In Your Love" (adult contemporary) - Would LOVE feedback! 2011/02/07 18:15:52 (permalink)
    Sounds pretty good to me - would easily be at home on commercial radio stations. The vox don't quite sit right - on it rather than in it, but I most oftren struggle with same thing, so can't really advise what to do.
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