some feedback on a track i fear is lacking

Well, this is only my opinion, but it seems like some of the sections take too long to evolve. For example, you have a section that may be taking 2 measures before the next layer comes in. You might cut that down to 1 measure. Also seems like it could use a bit more percussion.

Just my thoughts.

ORIGINAL: pcmodeler

Well, this is only my opinion, but it seems like some of the sections take too long to evolve. For example, you have a section that may be taking 2 measures before the next layer comes in. You might cut that down to 1 measure. Also seems like it could use a bit more percussion.

i'd wondered if the percussion gets redundant. it might need something more "forward." i also think i'm going to cut one of the pads out altogether and then add something more attention grabbing that would move things along faster. it's like a fifteen layer cake with too much frosting in the middle.

thanks for listening

ORIGINAL: blipp
I think it's excellent. loved every minute of it.

well, if past precedent holds, that means i need to change it.

he he... (see, now if i didn't have that silly self-imposed no emoticon thing i could stick in a grin so you'd know i was kidding and that i probably should take this into account seriously because i value your opinion, but i do tend not to use emoticons as a rule, so instead i have to write this long winded explanation of what i'm trying to say rather than just using a damn emoticon).

jopy:

I liked it. Some very interesting ideas in there. The only thing that popped out as I listened was that I could imagine the song building to a more dramatic part at some point. I really like the dreamy ending.

Eric

two current points:
1) i have a fever, a sore throat, another middle ear infection and my wife's whole visiting family has a nasty bronchitis so they cough all night and I don't get much sleep -- the gist is I'm out of it and one ear is pretty stuffed
2) most of my pieces don't have lead parts. leads are way over-rated. they lead the listener, make it too easy to know what to listen to -- let the listeners wander, make up their own lead out of the elements available

if i was to change anything and it may be a mistake, i would try a nice round or slight fuzz bass to build a little more drama before the dreamy end

Im with ecamburn on this one....I thought it needed something else in there to build on.
and I think it would have been cool to here some big boomin bass hits here and there...
othere than that...it was a pretty simple track....sounds good.

that's very cool blipp. i like the depth of the samples you put in there, like the little tick and shake sounds that kept creeping in. the pads were really nice too (what were you using?). the track overall was a little like a japanese painting, with a few brushstrokes placed in critical places across a mostly blank surface. this track makes a nice complement to your other stuff. thanks!

i did do an update to this track based on your collective feedback (still can be uploaded from the link above), and of course, my own twisted take on reality. it's really pretty much the same piece except for a bunch of changes. per sean's suggestion, i added a massive compressed 808 kick drum track. it occurs once every 320 bars.

for real, the main flow of the song is the same, i just added a few spices:
a) a chromatic bass run towards the middle that repeats a few times
b) some more chromatic chord action to add tension to the very "inside" chord structures
c) a heavily processed audio sample of me reassuring my son that his spilled orange juice can be cleaned up easily.
d) some massive rhythm destroying echos towards the end

so, to put it simply, now the van with a broken headlight spins out near the end and stalls in the middle of the road while the passengers collect their thoughts and breathe deeply, relieved that no one is hurt. a little more dramatic tension, but hopefully not too much to distract from the overall sense of a flowing piece that lets the mind wander among sections.

okay, that's it for electronic manipulation for a while. starting next week we'll be working mostly on free jazz in a more collaborative vein. that'll be a switch-o, eh?

Just got round to listening to the latest version and it gets the thumbs up from me. I still like the original version too though.

thanks eric and blipp. we still have to see if sean can find the big bass. i know it's around here somewhere...

i suppose i'll take that as a compliment?

ORIGINAL: :10:
I did miss the bass hit though, I listened to it 5 or 6 times trying to find it....maybe the mp3 cut it out???

i think i found the bass hits! they're about a minute into this other track about tornado warnings:
dub for blaine

sorry for the confusion, sometimes our beats creep around from track to track without telling us.