!st Draft - Lying Down

This is a first draft of one of my son's songs we recorded over Thanksgiving.  He is zeroing in on fulfilling his New Year's resolution to write a song a day in 2012 (366 songs).  I think he is in the low 340's.
 
http://www.imadavisnotesart.com/images/Lying_Down.mp3
 
Please offer your comments/suggestions.  It is a halfway decent mix for a first draft, but I would appreciate any advice you may have.
 
Thanks,
Jerry