wider

 
This is not the kind of music I usually listen to, hence why I should refrain from commenting. Anyhow a few general comments would be:
I miss some variations in the song, that compared to the lenghts ot the song make it difficult (for me) to hear it out to the end.
I kind of like the tempo and the feel. 
 
Mix-wise, again it´s not my genre, what caught my attention was the drumpart, I would tighten them up, but that just me.
Just my few cents
 

I'd have the percussion sounds louder - they're kind of masked by all the guitars.

thanks for the input everyone. 
 
synkrotron: fraser is a long time favorite of mine. her vocal style is definitely a take off point for me for sonic qualities. that "post rock" piece has a video that goes along with it: http://www.frostforus.com/
'wider' will too eventually.
kev: thanks for that. i always struggle with the percussion. constantly going back and forth with where it sits in the mix. sometimes i get it correct and sometimes just can't get it all. and for each song it's totally different so i cannot just take a previous mix and apply it to the next song. like i mentioned: i was at ear fatigue zone so at this point i have almost tuned the drums out of my mind. i'll have to go revisit them when feeling fresh.
starise: i have difficulty deciding which guitar parts to bring forward vs sending to the back or side to side. it's a bigger problem when i end up with 2,3, or 4 different melodies to play with so i just stick it all in there and let serendipity take over. guitars as a showcase doesn't interest me as much as the tonal quality and interaction of melodies over competing chords. maybe that is by definition a "showcase" i guess, but not in the traditional sense. not being terribly proficient i end up with some sonic confusion that i personally enjoy. and i do tend to write stuff to sit more in the background of my day so that on-and-on-and-on quality fits that mindset. i have been told before that "the music doesn't really go anywhere" and that ends up being a product of the process and fairly intentional, so mission accomplished???
 
will hit the mix board again later when feeling less ambivalent about it all. thanks again for your time folks.

took 3 months to redo, and such and then the video guy did another 2 months on it and then it took me 3 months to get back to this place, but, here is a diff rendition that still maintains the shoegaze nature with guitar washiness and the snare in a water tank. also tried to take the "heat" out of the mix and reduce the mud.
 
I took a break from it during November. Came back to relisten in December and found that there are several sections, one being near the beginning, that are severely out of tune and there are timing issues that I didn't notice during those 5 months of redo, but the video was already in the can and now I am sick of it. So, apologies in advance for that. Already moving on so I think I will just live with it. 
Thanks again everyone. I do think your input gave me a nice push to make something better.
https://vimeo.com/144231084