Desciple - something different from the norm (for me)

I found some old vacation videos and decided to score some music for them.  This is the first song I wrote, an instrumental titled "Desciple".  I've written instrumentals in the past, but not with the modern tools I have today.  Other than Superior Drummer and Jamstix, I stayed in the box with X1, using z3ta-2, Rapture, and Dimension Pro.  Nothing is set in stone, so if you all have suggestions, I'm all ears.  BTW, the ending on this is very abrupt by design, as if it were swallowed by a black hole.  That, too, isn't set in stone, yet.  I want to thank in advance all who take the time to listen to this piece.

I remastered this today (8/9) to reduce the volume of the mp3 file.  Hopefully this will not distort.

This has been remixed today (8/11) to address the "jump cuts" issues and to put a fade on the ending for those who didn't care for the abrupt end.
 
It can be found here:http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?q=hi&songID=11816663  

  Lynn this was a really nice piece to listen to, especially since I also just upgraded to X1 and I am using out-of-the box tools. You covered a range of synths here in this! My first listen to this hurt my ears, as I had the sound up enough to preview most others' songs on here - how do you get such high compression without clipping? I took in several of your others and they're at the same level. *lol* I'll just remember next time to roll down the gains a tad before previewing one 'a yours! haha Nice job though on the synths and production. I think you should create an actual ending though, rather than the black hole effect! Perhaps a fade-out on a loop of what you have going near the end would be great. Nice work! - John

I have to say I quite like it too..

@ cclarry and guitarpima, thank you both for having a listen and taking the time to respond.  Having listened to both your songs today, I jazzed to be in such good company.

Hi Lynn , love this one ! The mix could use alittle fine tuning , I'm hearing that fizz type sound too Daryl mentioned .

Nice job, like your choice of synth sounds , keeps your interest high from start to finish .

James

Hi Daryl, thanks for taking the time.  I think the fizz you are hearing is a result of mastering the wave file too loud.  I will reduce the volume by several db on the next pass.  The bass samples come from Dimension Pro.  The one at the beginning and end is called Modern from the Synth Bass patches, and the one in the middle section is Artificial Fretless, also from the Synth Bass patches.

James, I'm glad you liked it.  Some of your own work inspired me to do this instrumental, so thanks for that.

Daren, I'm glad you liked it, as well.  Your own venture into experimental music was on my mind, too.  I enjoyed this project so much that I'm going to continue scoring old videos that I have lying around.

wow that sounds huge... very good Lynn...

Frank and Gary, thank you for stopping in and having a listen.  I appreciate your comments very much.

Hi Lynn,
Nice song...it does kinda hearken back to Enigma. 
A couple notes - 

I do hear the "jump cut" that was referred to earlier in the thread. It happens between 2:32 and 2:33 and I think it's either a cut/trimmed waveform at a non-zero point or an artifact of the Z3ta patch you're using. 

You may want to experiment with a reverb tail at the end just to give the listener the impression that the song ends "on purpose" as opposed to checking his playback device or streaming server. If you still want to maintain an abrupt or black-hole kind of feel, maybe even try adding some reverb to the final cymbal crescendo, bounce it, cut off just the reverb tail, reverse it and cross-fade it with the original reverb tail so that you hear first the cymbal crescendo, then the reverb tail which transitions into the reversed tail and ends abruptly.

OTOH, if you like it that way or if it's video scoring and it works with the film, leave it just as it is :)

Nice work,
Dean

This is pretty cool. I don't think it sounds like 'Enigma' but I do think it's got a cool cross-era vibe with touches from synth wizards of the 70s through to up to date stuff.

Good job, love the bass patch and the choice of synths is good.

Cheers,
Terry.

Listening again Lynn, this is a great song to me, great soundtrack material...waiting the ending...

Hey, Lynn,
 
I missed the first couple mixes that you mentioned, but this new one really sounds terrific!
 
Excellent writing and arranging, perfect choice of well textured synths, and a nice clean, pro sounding mix.
 
Great stuff, buddy!
Bob

Awesome! Really love the synth riff. Nice passage transitions and variations on that same theme and then bringing it back together again. Excellent synth choices.

Hi Bob, thanks for having a listen.  I appreciate you comments.

James, your words are very encouraging.  Thanks for taking the time.

vechung, I'm so happy you enjoyed your visit.  After hearing your latest song, I'm quite pleased with your comments.  All of you make me want to work even harder on the next song that I do.

Makke, thanks for stopping by and listening.  Enjoy the forum!