NEW SONG NAME - NEW EVERYTHING !!

 
Hi everyone , this is a song I started a month ago working on it an hour here and there not really rushing to get it finished but this is what I have so far .
I do plan on writing some lyrics to it and adding some of my own vocals to the song when I'm ready to move into that stage . 
 
http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=10792951&q=hi&newref=1
   

 
By the way Scotty this is the song I told you about a month ago saying it might be ready in mid July , if your interested in adding guitar give a ring by e-mail .
 
Any reviews would be great good or bad doesn't matter , this is a rough mix not the final mix by the way .
I mix as I'm recording each track and this is what I ended up with , thanks !
 
 
I titled this song " GET DOWN LOW " hope you enjoy it as a WIP .

jamesyoyo


Sounds familiar...
 
Not from any of my older songs , The intro was created using Notion 3 and the chorus sections was also created using Notion 3 .
Now in the verse sections I did use the same synth instrument as in one of my older recent songs , maybe that rings a bell but played differently .

Anyway maybe thats where you heard that sound before , hey if you like it why not go with it !
 
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dlogan


I got an error on soundclick - said it couldn't load. Not sure if that's a problem with your file or a soundclick problem.

 Sorry Dave , I got the same thing and then I clicked it again after closing out of it and it was working .
 Try clicking again to see if it works , if it doesn't work then I'll have to upload it again I guess .
 
Thanks !
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jamesg1213

jamesyoyo


Sounds familiar...

I have to agree. It's mid-tempo, 4/4, in a minor key, like the majority of your tunes. Not to say that there's anything wrong with that per se, but it might be nice to ring the changes now and again.

Speaking of changes, this whole tune seems to be one chord (Dm) - some tension and release would be nice, by way of some more chords, and perhaps a breakdown at midpoint.

Sounds fine as it is of course James, but it is a bit on the dull side to my ears.
 
Thanks for the listen and comments , the main section I started out with had about four different chords and then I added other things over that part of it .
Maybe I should had waited untill the lyrics and vocals were in , that alone can end up changing the way the whole song sounds .

Thanks for the feedback !
 
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Good textures in there. The drums kick butt. I agree with the others that it needs some more chords and changes to keep it interesting.

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Hi everyone , this is a song I started a month ago working on it an hour here and there not really rushing to get it finished but this is what I have so far . 
  

  
  
 
I do plan on writing some lyrics to it and adding some of my own vocals to the song when I'm ready to move into that stage .
 
By the way Scotty this is the song I told you about a month ago saying it might be ready in mid July , if your interested in adding guitar give a ring by e-mail .
 
Any reviews would be great good or bad doesn't matter , this is a rough mix not the final mix by the way .
I mix as I'm recording each track and this is what I ended up with , thanks !
 
 
I titled this song " GET DOWN LOW " hope you enjoy it as a WIP .

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I like the groove you have created here. The reverb guitar part I think really works well.
I think what the others were trying to suggest is to add something to your cool groove to change it, so it did not sound so much like a loop. I like what you have so far, but to add some additional changes (breaks from groove) would make what you have even better. Keep at it, there is a song hiding in this groove.

Scottytunes


Good textures in there. The drums kick butt. I agree with the others that it needs some more chords and changes to keep it interesting.
 
Thanks Scotty I agree , I'm still working at it . Maybe in a day or so something .

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Yes, a little repetitive, but it's well played. 

Janet


Yes, a little repetitive, but it's well played. 
 
Thanks Janet , all that is soon going to change soon , I'm reworking the song for the third time  .
Another thing is if you noticed I didn't add in any drum fills like I do in most of my songs , I used cmblas crashes instead to keep the groove moving from start to finish

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BIABDude


I'm just making a suggestion from the comments from the others and what I'm hearing. 
I've listen to all your songs and they are all very good. 
But i hear rhythms that sound the same. 
I see you are going to take your anger out on me that is, OK  Feel free to whip on me my BOX is strong and your words can not and will not make me shake.
 
Thats ok I keep a roll of duck tape in my pocket , I just kidding with you !
Hey I'm not perfect , every song for me is a learning process and the only way to learn is to fall down first .
If you an't falling down then your not learning !

Anyway I really should be working with chords instead of trying to layered in all my sounds to create a song .
Its alittle too late to start over with this song , the best I can do is to find a way to fit in some chords .
I might try deleting some tracks that might be getting in the way , I don't know all I'm doing now is trying different things to see where I end up .
 
Anyway sooner or later your going have to open that box , you need a box cutter ? LOL
 
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ChuckC


I like it, It has a cool mysterious sound to it but It really needs to go somewhere!   Build to a break, go sticata, go half time, double time... Change off the progression to give the ear something new!  Sounds like when you put in a movie dvd but don't press play and just let it sit at the main menu with some random song looping.... 
 
Thanks , most of my recent songs had those music elements in them but this song I was looking for something alittle out of the norm .
If anyone remembers Neverland a written song I did right after M.J. died its had the same song elements where the vocals supported the song mostly instead of fills and short breaks .
I started redoing Neverland and sort ended up going another direction in sound and the way the song feels so much so I felt I needed another song title .

In order to do what your talking about that would mean completely start over from the ground up , so far this song has thirty -three recorded tracks .
The best I can rely on now is to keep looking for chords that will change the song without tearing apart the song and using my vocals to polish off the song like I intended it to do .
 
Hey I get where your coming from checkout some of my recent songs and you'll see that stuff is all there .
I really value your suggestions but when finished with lyrics and vocals I think its going to end up as a good song , thats what I looking for and I'm not ready to give up on doing just that .
 
Thanks again for your support , lets see where this takes me in a few days or even a week with the music .
 
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Sorry I deleted this second version , I have been working on a third new version that has all new drum fills in it from start to finish .
Next I need to work on the verses and choruses in more detail , I'll post something by the end of this week I hope .

 Today I have been dealing with a middle finger that has been very sore for six months now and it makes it really hard to play my keyboard .
Six months ago cleaning shrimp I somehow jab my finger on a piece of shell cleaning the shrimp .
A month went by and finally I started trying to pick out what was causing all the soreness in the tip of my middle finger .
I thought I manage to get rid of whatever was stuck in my finger thinking it would heal up but it never really healed up completely .

Now I'm starting to think maybe I need to see a doctor to find out why this finger will not completely heal up so the soreness goes away .
Everytime I play something on my keyboard with my right hand the finger hurts from pressure , this really sucks !

Somehow I'm going to finish this song , I guess I will have to deal with the pain and get through it .
I guess I will have to call my doctor and see if she won't look at it to see whats going on with it and why it will not heal .

Anyway so much for bad news , I'm not going to let that stop me from finishing this song up this week .

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Hi James
 
Don't take this the wrong way, but you do know what a chord is, don't you?
 
If there's more than one chord in this song (and that D minor is only really implied by the melody and the bassline) I'm afraid I can't hear them. If they are buried somewhere why not let that nice little bass riff follow the root note to add the variety the song desperately needs.
 
Another thing (and again, this is only meant with the best of intentions) is the quality of the audio - it seems a little muffled and not very clear to me. There's no doubt that you've been improving since you got here, but your songs don't have the 'punch' and clarity that some of the electronica composers/performers songs do. Just out of interest, what Sampling Rate and Bit Depth are you projects recorded at?
 
Finally, I'd have to say you are quite a good drummer - it's just a shame your talent in this area is often wasted in these never-ending loop type tracks.
 
 
Steve
 
 

SteveStrummerUK


 
Hi James
 
Don't take this the wrong way, but you do know what a chord is, don't you?
 
Your wrong I was playing FIVE chords , I can give you the names and yes I do know what CHORDS are !
 
If there's more than one chord in this song (and that D minor is only really implied by the melody and the bassline) I'm afraid I can't hear them. If they are buried somewhere why not let that nice little bass riff follow the root note to add the variety the song desperately needs.
 
There isn't any DM in here ! The song sounds great just the way it is , sorry but the merry-go-round stops here I like what I created !
 
Another thing (and again, this is only meant with the best of intentions) is the quality of the audio - it seems a little muffled and not very clear to me. There's no doubt that you've been improving since you got here, but your songs don't have the 'punch' and clarity that some of the electronica composers/performers songs do. Just out of interest, what Sampling Rate and Bit Depth are you projects recorded at?
 
Finally, I'd have to say you are quite a good drummer - it's just a shame your talent in this area is often wasted in these never-ending loop type tracks.
 
Sorry for the RED ink but the song sounds great , I was sitting in BurgerVille today listening to a radio song and you know what it sounded very close to what I created .
The way the music was created is very close to the way I played this song , different sound but played the same way .
I don't know the name of the song but I have heard it many times before over the radio .
 
I'm sorry but I disgree with most of what you said with my song sounding loopy , there are many bands who play music this way and some of them are big name artist .
When I add lyrics and vocals to this music you'll see its not even going to sound like the same song almost .
Lyrics and vocals can change the feel of the song in many different ways , I like the music and I'm sticking with what I have right now .
 
I'll get back later with those five chords I used in my verse sections .
 
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Steve