jamesyoyo


Listening on the Ultrasones...

First off, I love the song: sounds really well written, and you sang it real fine. I really love the first 30 seconds, when I thought this was one of the best things I have heard on the forum in quite some time. The piano was absolutely terrific. Then....

• Drums sound great, but the snare is just too heavy for the verses. It is even a bit heavy for the chorus when the guitars come in. The hats are also on the same side (on the right? Is Darren a lefty?) as the lead, so they clash freq-wise, and are way out of balance volume-wise.
• +1 on the reverb on the vocal issue. Sounds like there is both a slap echo and a longer plate, but the plate is too short and too big, if you know what I mean.
• bass is kinda indistinct some of the time. Warren, you played the heck out of it, but when everyone is going with you, it gets a little lost and muddy.
• the "coming around" line 2:00 needs some more 2 pole filter on it to separate it from the lead vocal
• bgvox also needs some eq job to also separate them from the lead vocal
• lyrically, there a ton of great ideas, but they just don't seem to tie together all that well.  I listened four times and I am not sure the connection between the rain, the redlight, the guy, the leather. Individually, like I said, great, but there almost sounds like there was a unifying verse that got dropped (made me think of the Elton John  song "Daniel," where the last verse, which actually makes sense out of the whole tune, got dumped, and should have been left in.)